This is a book read by someone who has been asking English questions in my blog.  Just from the few examples provided by that person, I believe it to be a good book even though I did not read the entire book.

 

What I like about the book is the concept that it is trying to convey, which is what I have been preaching all along.  

寫一個句子要注意四件事:

敘述必須正確(correct)

用字必須具體(concrete)

結構必須簡潔(concise)

意思必須清晰(clear)

 

The book is not perfect as the explanations may not be clear all the time.  However, it does provide ample before and after examples of what a good sentence consists.  With that, I do recommend reading it.

 

This is an example that was provided to me.

 

Before:

An efficient middle school system of today should include adequate provision of manual training.

 

After:

A modern, efficient middle school should provide adequate training.

 

Can you see the difference between the two sentences?  The sentence rewritten becomes more clear, accurate and precise. 

 

These are my explanations:

 

1.  Simplicity:

Of today -> modern

 

2. Correct word usage:

Since it is talking about the school, "system" is removed for its skewing the meaning.  

 

3.  Redundancy and wrong usage

(a)  Provision when used as a noun usually means contracts, so it is somewhat misleading in this sentence.  Replace "include" with "provide" and remove "provision".  “Provide” is a stronger and better word to use in this case.

 

(b) "Manual" and "training" provides similar purpose.  "Manual" is a book of instruction.  So we remove "manual" and keep "training" instead.

 

This is the book

英文寫作瘦身法

作者:陳世琪

出版社:正中書局  

ISBN9570914742

博客來:

http://www.books.com.tw/exep/prod/booksfile.php?item=0010194443

 

 

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